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Here's the latest update...but first. Part of the delay in posting is due to a previous comment that had me revisiting some old stories. It's amazing how time causes one to forget. And how the mind can trick one into believing that they are doing something novel when, in fact, they're just treading...

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Hey folks, here's the next bit. As Dr. D. jokingly suggested, it's time for a quick tea and scone break from the main action. And, for sure, Riven definitely has issues. I've tried to hint at them throughout the story, but chapters 14 and 30 are good places to start for folks in need of a quick re-...

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Super appreciate all the comments and PMs. Can't say this enough...you're all stars. Dr. D - Yes, definitely a bit of a car wreck. Hopefully folks don't need reminding but, just in case, this is a dungeon story. Buckle up and leave the kids behind. Bert - Welcome to the site!? Always special to be ...

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Big, big thanks to Dr.D and Exxon for your comments—very kind (totally not worthy). To be honest, thank you never seems sufficient. It's reassuring to hear that people are enjoying. But even if you're not, I'd love to hear why. Criticism, unlike silence, I can handle. On with the show. p.s. I might...

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Exxon, them is fighting words. Helen is amazing in the movie. The problems - and there are several - have nothing to do with her. I'm afraid apologies are in order...matter of honor. Nothing personal.

More importantly, glad others are enjoying AEM's story. At last, on that, we all agree.

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Playing catch up: love what you’re doing. The fight scene in particular was a standout, but even when the story shifts to other characters…well, it’s still better than the ’84 movie. Looking forward to your take on all the great scenes to come. The presentation, thus far, has been excellent. Keep go...

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Glad folks are jumping back on board. I was worried after such a long hiatus but your comments and PM's have been encouraging—thank you. Here's the latest. _____________________________ ---------------------------------- 39 --------------------------------- Rushing to re-establish her footing, the ...

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Hey folk, I know, it’s been a while—apologies. The next chapter is below…but first: I’ve been debating, for some time, whether or not to continue publishing this story. I delayed, in part, because an eminent writer on this site, and one whose stories I admire, accused me of plagiarizing the works o...

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I'm doing this one quick (especially the images). Which means, I'll probably circle back and edit later - sorry, I hate doing it this way...just pressed for time at the moment. To all those who've commented - thank you. Actually, BIG thank you. You folks are stars. I know it's been said before, but...

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Howdy folks, Every chapter has its obstacles - this one especially. Switching from set-up to fight mode proved challenging. Way more challenging that I expected. There's a different rhythm to a fight (in story terms: it feels like a structure within a structure), which was hard for me to unlock. No...

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I'm grateful for whatever you choose to do, but I'd prefer keeping updates as they are and therefore no pause. (as it is I think I am wearing out the refresh button waiting to enjoy the next instalment.) As for requests, I'm hoping the revolution will be televised with Supergirl's costume taking so...

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Big thanks to all. Clyde — You're a man of few words – just my type. Dr. D — Sorry, the broom is staying out for one last update (see comments at end). Ksire — Thanks for the laugh; I needed it. Definitely all hard-hitting from here. On with the show: _____________________________ -----------------...

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Wow, thank you for the (amazing, wonderful, encouraging) comments. It's hard finding time for this and your support ...well, it helps make the pain worthwhile. For better or worse, here's the next part: _____________________________ ---------------------------------- 33 ----------------------------...

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Hard not to echo much of what has already been said. Let readers imagine what they will but the character and her background must definitely be crystal clear in your mind. Honestly, it sounds to me like you’re having a structural issue. I would say decide on the type of story you want to tell and th...

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Just want to give a big thanks to Dr. D, Clyde and Masmune for your comments—super appreciated. As I finished this latest bit, it occurred to me that there's a version of this story that hypothetically could have started here—with this chapter. Which caused me to question whether I've gotten this w...

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Big thanks to both Exxon and Clyde for your comments. Glad you're both still enjoying the tale. Unfortunately, I've decided to give the images a rest - at least for now. But don't worry Exx, Riven will be back. Actually, for anyone still on the fence, this is a good time to catch up. From here, thi...

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Artee, I finally had a chance to catch up on this and just want to say congrats. This is a great story. One of the best I've read on the forum. Love your writing style. And, above all, I applaud the ambition. I love stories with depth and this has plenty. In terms of scenes: the two with the serum a...

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As previously mentioned, I've never been able to get this deep into a story before. Feels weird. Definitely unfamiliar terrain. The comments help. Actually, they've been amazing. I would never have made it this far without the community's support. Seeing the response and knowing this story has an a...

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Damn . I'm very late to this story, but I love how each character is painted so differently from one another. And how you portray Supergirl's weakness not because of the usual kryptonite and all, but through, as you said, targeting the 'girl' instead of the 'super'. It's probably been done before b...

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A few notes of appreciation: Dr. D - Thanks for the kind words. I've said it before but writing can be a really crumby gig. Your support has made a difference. I think many others on this forum would echo this sentiment. Ksire - You think too highly of me. I'm prone to cheating at chess, but I can ...

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This was another tricky section. Actually, it was more like a cold shower. The point where I finally realized that my ambition far exceeded my skill as a writer. When I started, this particular story, I had a checklist of things I hoped to accomplish. One of these included trying to come up with an...

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Masmune wrote: ↑
4 years ago
Fantastic chapter! It might be out of your comfort zone, but you wrote it very well!

Thanks Masmune. I can't say this enough, but knowing people are reading makes a world of difference. It was definitely a tricky section to write...but also a necessary one.

girlofsteel

I almost didn't publish this part. Much of this is way outside of my (writing) comfort zone. Still, hope folks enjoy. And, if you can, please take a sec to let me know what you think. Good, bad...honestly it all helps. Here's the next bit. ________________________ ----------------------------------...

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Clyde, wondergirlsupragirl this one's for you - thanks for your awesome comments. Hopefully you continue to enjoy. In terms of the update, I wanted to add another image of Riven at the bottom, but held back because I thought it would compete with the text. I guess I felt like there is a thing as to...

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Hey GYE I've also been lazy. This next bit was tricky to sort out. It's a necessary lull ... that tees up all the "good stuff" you alluded to. Hopefully, folks stay engaged (I do apologize for the delay). The next few updates will be on time. I promise, plenty of action ahead. Voila: ____...

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Hard to add; a lot of great stuff has already been said. And yet, I’ve had this very question on my mind lately. Like others I do intricate outlines. I’m also a slow writer (crazy slow). I fixate on words. And, even worse, I overthink. Plus, I do an inordinate amount of research. Before typing a sin...

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100 percent on board. So you better continue. I too get frustrated by the silence. But honestly, what you're doing has quality. There is intelligence and craft and all of that shows. It's why your work is a cut above. In terms of feedback - sometimes the pacing is a bit slow. But the tone is great (...

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This next section is a bit of an homage to "Mari & Salina," one of Joniar's older pieces. If you're not familiar, he was a super prolific author. Not sure if he's on this forum but I highly recommend his stories—"Supergirl vs. the Demon" and "Tawila" are personal f...

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I did want to add some mild criticism about your story. I've been having some trouble with the Army team in this story, not just keeping their characters straight but their overall mission in general. Not to mention how they got from Hawaii to the Pentagon so fast. I could just be dense about it al...

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Okay, I've gone though and added a few images. I'm still hesitant about this. People can be touchy (understatement of the year). And since reading is such a personal experience, well...let's just say I'm not looking to add fuel to any fires. Readers, as it is, are hard enough to come by. Nevertheles...

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You stories are well written, and I think your an awesome writer, however I am ready to leave this sight permanently...Truth in advertising, they should rename this sight the "super girl Bat girl" heroine sight...those are not my interest and it's almost all you get any more (waiting for ...

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wondergirlsupragirl, Ksire: thanks for the comments - you're awesome. I'll go back in a bit and add some photos. Okay, hope folks enjoy the next chapter (it was fun to write). _____________________________ ---------------------------------- 15 --------------------------------- Shake for me girl. Sh...

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Let me start by thanking all who do comment and leave feedback. As a writer, it means the world. For me, one of the most demoralizing things is when a new story gets buried within hours of being posted beneath a sea of dribble i.e. resuscitating a long dead post or the latest politically-laced ranti...

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Here's the next part. _____________________________ ---------------------------------- 14 --------------------------------- Linda Danvers hated this feeling. For days, her stomach had been doing circles. Ever since Hawaii, nothing had been going right. And now, as she fumbled through her purse, thi...

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I personally use her heroine name in costume and her alias out of it when interacting with other characters in civvies and in the case of Kara El I use her Kryptonian alias when she is having moments to herself when no one is there Kara thought through what she would do Supergirl hit the thug Linda...

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ksire_99 ask and you shall receive. From here on out, I'm not committing to any specific time frame. The story is getting bigger than anticipated, but I'll do my best to publish on a semi-regular basis. I am, however, highly subceptible to bribery via comments. Okay, enough from me, it's time to ra...

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This is always a Wednesday highlight. Can't wait for the conclusion. I especially enjoy the psychology and the effort you make with the humiliation suit readout panels. It feels like a massive effort. On the one hand constricting (your limited by visuals) but at the same time immensely creative. Hon...

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Apologies - playing catch up. The overall vision of this story (as well as its execution) is why I keep coming back. The Batman scene (as well written as it was) isn't my cup of tea. But the kidnapping of Miss Leonie was exceptional. For me, this scene really kicked the story into a higher gear - en...

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ksire_99 wrote: ↑
5 years ago
yes, just like batgirl. Normal human, with extraordinary skills and a sexy costume.

Solid comparison. The only difference I see is that she doesn't have a secret identity. So while I'm leaning towards yes, I'm still not fully there.

girlofsteel

While I haven't read the manga, I enjoyed and recommend the film. It's definitely in line with the heroine genre. See it on the biggest screen possible - it's worth the money. It's also Roberto Rodriguez' best film in a long time. And while I too was concerned about the eyes, they're not an issue on...

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Here is the conclusion to act I. Thanks to all for joining me on this ride. _____________________________ ---------------------------------- 8 ---------------------------------- Again, and again, Supergirl fired her heat-vision in vain, as the missiles whisked by. They’re anticipating my attacks. I...

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Two more missiles targeting the special forces team? Shouldn't be an issue for our beautiful blonde heroine … unless the woman in the camouflage outfit and the incredible body is strong enough to prevent her from doing so. Nice action scene with SG and good work on the team dynamics too. Hey Dr. D,...

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Sorry, a bit late on this one. I've decided to finish at least up to the end of Act 1 (should take one or two more postings). Hopefully, this way, those who've stuck with the story feel rewarded, while also giving those who stumble upon it, at some future date, more of a natural ending. One questio...

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And we're here. Sort of. Feels like we've reached a natural pause...so I guess this is as good a place as any to gage whether the curtain should rise or fall. There have been so many great stories lately that, at times, it can feel intimidating to step into the ring. The comments, thus far, have be...

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Gotta start with a big "woot-woot." As those who've read any of my previous stories can attest, it's a mini miracle that this update is coming out on time. Thanks to all for your support. It's super (sorry, couldn't help it) motivating to know that people are engaging. :thanks: So, let's ...

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Thanks all for the encouragement. I really appreciate you taking the time; writing can get painfully lonely. Knowing that somebody else is out there...well, that makes all the difference. The next instalment should be ready for Monday. With the initial scene setting out of the way, Supergirl will fe...

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Here's a story I'm thinking of developing. To be honest, I'm still feeling my way through. The aim is to create a slow burn, so folks seeking an immediate pay-off should probably look elsewhere (but I'm willing to bet I can win you over). For those interested in taking the ride—please let me know w...

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Great stuff. The audacity of what you’re attempting here is humbling. Well researched with equally great character and scenes. I’m especially jealous of Supergirl’s personality - solid development through her interactions with Abbey as well as her editor. It’s evident that a lot of work has gone int...

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Definitely post part 2. I’m enjoying the writing. Just hope you don’t take the “super” away from the “girl” too quick. I’m also having a hard time picturing Kara’s restraints - an image might help, but the general idea is clear. I love original stories like this, I’m Interested to see where this goe...

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I understand what you’re saying. There is indeed a strange duality involved in creating these types of stories. They take a toll. I’ve stopped writing, in part, because I too have difficulty reconciling these fantasies. There have been so many nights when I've begun to reach out to family, but I can...

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